Disclaimer Notice: you been warned

Disclaimer Notice
If you're here looking for some good writing, close the tab right now. This is a blog that started off as a writing solace and instead turned into a place to rant off about anything and everything. So, this is going to be an awful lot of just penning down my thoughts, and then deciphering the confusion in emotions, with a not-so-gloomy outlook, or an ambivalent ending, if not a total-downer one.
Peace out. You've been warned.

Sunday, December 19, 2010

Chapter 1

Oh no, it was already eight. That was the first thought that came to my mind when I looked at the clock in the railway station. I had already missed the train and now very soon, the last bus to leave the city would depart as well. "cat, mingle bat, cherry tree, sunny sky" I kept repeating these words so I wouldn't get a panic attack. I kept repeating them over and over until my breathing returned to normal, and I could finally think again. well more clearly then before I mean.
   Oh man, I've really screwed up big this time. Tomorrow is my sister's wedding and I just missed the last train to Carney, no wait correction, the only train to Carney. In case you're wondering where on that is, it's a village in Menominee County of the U.S. state of Michigan, with a population of merely 225. Leave it to my sister to find the perfectly hidden place for her wedding . I'm not saying I'm not happy for her, of course I am, but being the uniquely weird person that she is, she chose a village called Carney which is more than a thousand miles away from Houston. All of our family members and distant relatives had already arrived there last week by air. That leaves me, I guess there's nothing I can do.
    Honestly, it's not even my fault. I mean it's not my problem that my autocratic boss didn't give me a leave for my sister's wedding, I had quit my job. All thanks to my sister, who would just not listen to any excuse, her emotional blackmailing was one of the reasons why I took such a drastic measure. Besides, I was also getting sick of that job, I was working part time in an architectural firm while studying in texas A &M uni. But my semester had just ended and I had holidays, so I was really hyped up about my sister's wedding.
"hey listen..." some one asked me. I jumped back startled and looked up. 
It was a guy who looked like he was eighteen, had black hair with blue highlights and bangs that perfectly fell above his eyes. He had the most gorgeous blue eyes I had ever seen, a mixture of navy blue and gray. Wearing a black cap under his grey hoodie and black baggie jeans, he had the typical skater boy look.
'Yeah?'
'I think this belongs to you'
He handed me something that looked like a small black diary.
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to be continued





18 comments:

  1. wow...dude seriously its perfectly amazingg!!! =)
    em waiting to read da nxt part!!!!
    best oV luck!!!

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  2. this is amaaazing mashalll,,, i will be waiting for the next chapter .. bravo keep going :))

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  3. wowwwwwwwwww..........itss ammmmmazing!!! i m hooked to it!!! anxiously waiting for the rest of it!! ATB for it!

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  4. WHY DOES HE HAVE BLUE HIGHLIGHTS?!!...otherwise it's great keep goin :D

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  5. wHOAA cant wait till da 2 chapterr

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  6. wow...!!! i mean I'm just speechless...this is awesome i mean your awesome with a capital "A"...i cant believe you wrote it...i love it and I'm just not saying that i mean it...LITERALLY...<3 :D BEst of luck 4 the future :D

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  7. THANK YOU so much everyone, you guys just made my day , I'm working on the chapter continuation, will post it ASAP. =)

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  8. aww!!the guyz soo cutely discribed!!! <3!!!i love it cant w8 for the next chapter!!!=] =] =]

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  9. mind blowing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! awesum story. yaar zara jaldi climx n den end inbox kr do :p

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  10. shabash keep it up

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  11. i really like this begining of the story. looks rlli interesting. keep it up and keep me posted!

    tc.

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  12. wow mashal i luved ur story...its really awsume...keep up yaar... :D

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  13. hey mashal! i just read this and i'm already really interested. great work! keep going- cant wait to read the next bit :)
    -nolaforever

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  14. I really like it mashal :) it's just A-mazing and I'm waiting for more from u as u know am rlly fond of reading and now it's ur story so I just can't wait for the second chapter :) keep it up sweetie n btw I rlly do miss u :(
    Lots of love <3
    Hend abdelhady
    Your friend :)
    xoxo

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  15. A good try, I can see many possible events occurring in the story. You should try not to repeat some words if you can help it....e.g such as 'he' as you did when you were describing the boy.
    All in all I am really happy to finally have something light and fun to read...please continue :D
    MKJ

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  16. AMAZINGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG

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  17. Chapter 3 was interesting, nice idea about crossing half of America :) lol thats like one of my favorite things to read about, a girl going on a journey. I do hope the ending isn't tragic, how about getting them run into robbers? Or people chasing after them for some valuable object that her sister Grace has or.....ok I guess I should stop. But this chapter was the best by far in my opinion, you made it end pretty well. Oh yes and if you already had in mind to write about robbers and stuff don't stop just because I wrote that, your story isn't predictable at all. I just like thinking about whats going to happen thats all. :D
    k then thats it for now
    MKJ ;)
    Looking foward to chapter 4

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  18. Nice!
    :)
    Can't say I found any mistakes in this one, the continuation was exactly what it should be, what I mean is that you didn't lose or change your style while continuing. :D
    Hiking? Great idea! Make them buy some tents too, and get lost in a forest....or have to take shelter in a mountain cave.....or...well you get the idea
    ;)
    oh yes and sorry for reviewing so late....today my mom had 'cleaning day' and if you saw the storeroom in the afternoon you would have thought it was a 3-day project.
    But NO my mom had to clean it all up TODAY so i basically got no time to check your blog.
    :)
    well then till next time,
    MKJ :D

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